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Band 4.5

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, - describe the training course you want to do  - explain what the company could do to help you - say how the course will be useful for your job Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing to request permission to attend a training
course
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 called " Business
comunnication
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communication
 skills".
Which
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 is highly useful for my job as I have to deal with foreign customers. In
this
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course
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course,
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 there will be training about teamwork,
inhancment
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enhancement
 in communication skills and public relations
,
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. The
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 training will be for 2 months
and
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, and
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class
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the class
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 will be conduct in alternative days. I
will
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would
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appreciate
if
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it if
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company
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the company
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 could help me by paying part of my
course
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 fee and
allow
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 me
flexibility
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flexible
 working hours , as 2 days
in the
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a
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 week classes will be in the evening,but
rest
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the rest
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 of
classes
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the classes
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 will be in the morning. I will try my best to balance my job responsibilities and training.  I
beleive
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believe
,
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apply
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this
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course
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 is highly beneficial for our organisation as my work is regularly
communicat
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communicating
 with customers and clients. It will help
rest
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the rest
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 of
employees
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the employees
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 as I will be able to share my knowledge and techniques with
other
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others
 to
incearse
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increase
 their working abilities. I hope you will think about it and
considerate
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consider
 my request, as it is beneficial
my
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for my
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 career
as well as
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 for the
organization
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organisation
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. Yours faithfully Khgjhvv

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task response
Answer all three parts in a clear way. Add one short line for each point.
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Use a more even work tone. Do not use very long lines.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main idea in its own paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy link words like also, because, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Check the start and end of the letter. Write Dear Sir or Madam, and Yours faithfully, with care.
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You say the name of the course and why you want it.
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You ask for help from the company in a clear way.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas mostly follow a good order.
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