The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the following chart is a illustrtion for each individual household
on
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in
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five different
countries
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wich contains
fife
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five
different categories
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food
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: food
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,housing,
transportation
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,health care,
clothing and we're
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and clothing. We're
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gonna
to
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apply
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illustrate the
digram
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diagram
for each country
First
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First,
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let's start with
United
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the United
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States. For the
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food
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food,
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they spend 14% comparing to other
countries
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and
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, and
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for the
housing
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housing,
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it's the highest among all the
countries
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coming
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to 26%
also
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the
transpotation
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transportation
is 17%
including
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the bus and the train
for
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. For
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the health
care
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care,
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is seeting at 7% wich is the peak
between
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among
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other famlies but if we
see
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look at
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the
clothing
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clothing,
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the United States is the lowest
coming
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, coming
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to 3%
let's
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move
for Canda
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to Canada
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for
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, for
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the
food
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is
sligtly
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slightly
above
thr
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the
United States
coming
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, coming
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to 15% but if we
looked
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look
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at housing is set at 20% moving on to
transportation
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is
seeting
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setting
around 20%
also
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the health care has a decent precntage coming to 4% and
lastly
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for the colthing
Canada
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, Canada
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is the highest among all other
countries
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seting at 6% For the United
Kingdom
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Kingdom,
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the
food
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consuming prescantage
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consumption percentage
is 20%
for
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, for
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the
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apply
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housing
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housing,
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the UK is the second highest after the US wich is 24% for the
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transportation
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transportation,
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it's 15%
also
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the UK has the lowest amount
spending
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spent
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on healthcare
coming
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, coming
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to 2% the clothing is 5%
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Lastly
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Japan for the
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apply
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food
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Japan
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has the highest
consuming
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consumption,
coming at 23%
for
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, for
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the
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apply
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housing
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housing,
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it's 24%
for
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, for
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the
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apply
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transportation
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transportation,
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it's averaging around 15%
for
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, for
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the health-care
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health care
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Japan
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, Japan
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is tied
up
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apply
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with Canada 3% and for
clothing
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clothing,
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Japan
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is
avreging
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averaging
around 4%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, lastly".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, food, transportation, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • shares
  • major
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • trends
  • observations
  • patterns
  • highest
  • lowest
  • spending
  • features
  • 2009
  • Japan
  • United Kingdom
  • Canada
  • United States
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