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The graph below shows the percentage of money spent on advertising in five types of media in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph shows the percentage of advertising spending on five types of
media
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 in France from 2010 to 2040.
To begin
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 with, spending on
internet
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the internet
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 is projected
dramatically to grow
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to grow dramatically
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 and become the most popular
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media
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medium
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 for advertising by 2040.
In contrast
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, traditional
media
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 like newspapers, magazines and radio will decline. Television spending will swing but stay high throughout the period. In 2010, the internet was the least popular option, with around 3% of total advertising money.
However
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, it grew to 15% in 2020 and is expected to rise significantly
up
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apply
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to 35% in 2030, and
finally
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 reach 47% in 2040.
On the other hand
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, television started at around 36% in 2010 and
peak
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peaked
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 at 45% in 2020. After 2020, television spending is predicted to decrease to 37% by 2040. In 2010, newspapers had a large part of spending at 34%, but by 2040, that type of
media
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 will fall to 10%. Magazines and radio started lower, at 15% and 10% each. Both are forecast to fall constantly over the 30-year period,
end
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ending
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 at just 2% for magazines and 4% for radio in 2040.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words media with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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