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The graph below shows the percentage of money spent on advertising in five types of media in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graph
visualizes
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 the percentage of financial resources spent on
advertisement
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advertising
 in 5 different types of
media
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 in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040.
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, there are a few identifiable trends. Television had the highest spending at the beginning
whilst
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, whilst
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internet
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the internet
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 had
lowest
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the lowest
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. The
internet
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 is projected to be the highest spending form of
media
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 by 2040, whilst magazines
takes
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take
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 the spot as the lowest spending
media
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.
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, there are the increases, the most apparent increase is that of the
internet
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as
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 it showed substantial growth until the present from a low 4 per
cent
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 to approximately 26 per
cent
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 in 2026. The
internet
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 is still projected to grow over the following years and is estimated to expand from 26 per
cent
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 now to about 47 per
cent
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per
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cent
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 in 2040.
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, the majority of
media
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aside
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, aside
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 from the
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internet
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internet,
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 suffered and will suffer losses. Television fluctuated from steady growth in the period 2010
and
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to
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2019
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2019,
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 from 36 per
cent
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 to 45%
before
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, before
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 beginning its downfall to 41 per
cent
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 in 2026 and being projected to fall to 37 per
cent
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 by 2040. The most drastic decline is in the newspapers
which
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, which
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 went down from 34 per
cent
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17
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 per
cent
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 and are
forseen
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forecast
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 to go down by
an
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apply
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another 7 pr
cent
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 until 2040. Both magazines and radio have been on a steady decline
from
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since
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 2010, reaching below 10 per
cent
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 spending in the present and being projected to reach below 5 per
cent
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 spending by 2040.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words media, internet, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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