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You recently stayed at a hotel, but you were disappointed with the service. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: Explain why you were dissatisfied. Describe the problems you experienced. Say what action you would like the manager to take.

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Dear sir
i
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 am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding my
last
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hoilday
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holiday
 vacation was in your
hotel
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 . It was
on
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last
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 week , my room number was 12B I would like to explain the situation in more
details
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,since
i
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 was
in
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on vacation in
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italy vacation
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Italy
, I
have
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had
is
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to book your
hotel
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 to spend
for
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3 nights with
premium
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a premium
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 package.
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 , on my first
day
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day,
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 I spent with premium
quality
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 staff
services
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 .
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 , since the
secound
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second
 day I did not
received
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receive
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 any
of
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good
quality
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 meals ,
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 , for
the
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lunch I ordered
seafood
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a seafood
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 pasta meal and a italian vine bottle.
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,
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I received that meal within 1 hour ,
but
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it was a different pasta with
pistachchio receipe
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pistachio recipe
. I was extremely anxious about that day
due to
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 these issues. I would
appreeciate
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appreciate
 it if you could be more aware of
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this
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services
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Because
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because
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 even your
hotel
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 was
5 star
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5-star
quality
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. As the manager of the
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hotel
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hotel,
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 you could have a greate responsible about these minor
services
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.
How
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ever
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ever,
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enjoyed
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amazed
about
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by the
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 other
services
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on
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at
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 your
hotel
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will
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hope to see your
hotel
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 with premium
quality
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services
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 . Yours faithfully , Senura

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Say more clearly why you were not happy in the first line.
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Write all the main problems in a clear list or order.
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Ask for one clear action, like money back or an apology.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words like first, next, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You clearly say this is a complaint letter to the hotel manager.
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You give real details like room number, meal, and time.
coherence and cohesion
You use a greeting and a closing.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has more than one paragraph.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dissatisfied = not happy with the service
  • uncomfortable stay = a stay that was not easy or pleasant
  • poor service = bad service
  • ignore my complaint = not listen to my problem
  • dirty room = a room that is not clean
  • bad smell = an unpleasant smell
  • long wait = having to wait for a lot of time
  • broken air conditioning = the cooling system did not work
  • no hot water = hot water was not available
  • refund = money given back
  • apology = saying sorry
  • take action = do something to fix the problem
  • improve service = make the service better
  • staff training = teaching workers to do their job well
  • future guests = people who stay at the hotel later
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