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You recently stayed at a hotel and were very unhappy with the service you received.Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:Give details of your stayExplain what went wrongSay what action you expect the manager to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I
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this
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 letter to express my strong dissatisfaction during my
last
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 stay at your hotel
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, the
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 kiwi’s. My name is John
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 I was the guest in room 309 in your hotel. I was there for 2 nights, for my business meetings from 5th
april
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April
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 to 11th
april
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April
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. During my
stay
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stay,
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 one thing went wrong
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, which
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leads
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led
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 to frustration. Before booking your hotel, I had made
special
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a special
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 request for high internet speed and even paid extra for
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.
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, it was really essential for my business work to get
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a good
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 internet speed.
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, I had to struggle opening normal applications like WhatsApp for chatting with my clients. I am requesting you to consider
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neglecting
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neglect
 of my demand and return my extra paid money as soon as possible. Please ensure these
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 of issues which are spoiling your reputation in
market
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the market
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.I am looking forward
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 your prompt actions. Yours faithfully,

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task response
Task response: Say more about the stay, like the date and why the internet was very important. This will make your point more clear.
task response
Task response: Ask for clear action, like a full refund for the extra internet fee and an apology.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some lines are hard to follow because of grammar. Use short and clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Start each paragraph with one main point only: stay details, problem, and action you want.
task response
Task response: You answered all parts of the task: your stay, the problem, and the action you want.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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