The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to the UK who visited four various attractions in Brighton.
Overall
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, it is easy to see that the graph study Art Gallery, Pavilion, Pier, and Festival.
However
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, Pavilion shows the highest proportion among all these various attractions ,
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Art Gallery
was recording
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the smallest percentage
at the end
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of the period. In 1980, Pavilion started with the lowest recorded by less than 20%,
then
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grew during the period until reaching a peak of more than 40% at 1995, after that sharply fell in 2000 to less than 40%, with
gradually decease
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a gradual decrease
until reaching the lowest percentage in 2010 by approximately 30%.
In addition
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, Festival maintains a steady fluctuation with exacitly 30% at 1980, which is considered the largest amount , and less than 30% at 2010.
On the other hand
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, Art Gallery reached a peak in 1985 by more than 30%, and had the smallest
percentages
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among the four different attractions by less than 10% at 2010.
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Pier started with 10% at 1980,
then
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fluctuated throughout the years,
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then
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reached a peak in 2010 of more than 20%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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