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The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The five various industries’ percentage of country B’s economy with a forecast for 2025 are
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 in the bar chart. In 2005 the less popular industry was food processing it’s 11%, but the most chosen was finance it’s 32%, and average percentage had manufacturing, tourism and oil, coal and gas it was 21-25%. Over the following 10
years
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 the usage of 3 trades
rised
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, but the rest of it decreased by 6% each. After that
in
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, in
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2025
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2025,
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it can be seen a huge gap
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a huge gap can be seen
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 between
finance
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the finance
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 and manufacturing industries.
the
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The
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 gap was about 37%.
moreover
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 percentage of food processing and oil, coal and gas has
also
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 decreased.
only
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 tourism had the same share of
economy
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the economy
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 as in 2015.
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, during the period finance trade had a gradual increase over the whole period.
meanwhile
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, manufacturing had a slight drop.
as
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As
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 for
another
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other
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industries
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industries,
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 they went through steady changes on
it’s
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their
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 way.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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