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The given line graph compares the proportion of domestic waste recycling in the UK, France and Germany from 2005 to 2015.

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The line graph compares the percentage of domestic waste that was recycled in the
UK
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,
France
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 and Germany between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, recycling rates increased considerably in both the
UK
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 and Germany,
whereas
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France
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 experienced an
overall
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 decline despite a recovery in the final two years.
France
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 had the highest recycling rate at the beginning of the period, but the
UK
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 finished with the largest proportion. In 2005,
France
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 recycled exactly 50% of its domestic waste, compared with approximately 35% in the
UK
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. The British figure
then
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 rose to 40% in 2007 and remained unchanged in 2009. After that, it climbed sharply to around 55% in 2011 before increasing more gradually to just over 60% by 2015.
By contrast
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, the proportion in
France
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 declined steadily from 50% in 2005 to 40% in 2009, when it was equal to the
UK
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’s figure. It continued falling to approximately 33% in 2011 and reached its lowest point of just under 30% in 2013.
However
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, it recovered to 40% in the final year. Germany recorded the lowest figure
initially
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, at 20%.
Nevertheless
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, its recycling rate increased continuously, reaching approximately 33% in 2009 and 50% in 2013. By 2015, it had risen to around 57%, finishing only slightly below the
UK
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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