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šŸ“Š The graph below gives information about sugar production and consumption in India from 2001 to 2011

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šŸ“Š The graph below gives information about sugar production and consumption in India from 2001 to 2011
The line graph demonstrates the changes
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sugar
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production
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 and consumption between 2001 and 2011 in India.
Production
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 experienced sharp changes in 10 years,
while
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 consumption was quite stable. The
production
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 of
sugar
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 decreased from 19
million
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tonnes
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 to 17
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million tonnes
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between 2002 and 2003. It dipped in 2004
until
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 14
million
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tonnes
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 and decreased
further
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 in 2005, reaching 13
million
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tonnes
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 of
sugar
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. From 2005
and
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 2007, the
production
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 doubled its amount of
sugar
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, resulting in 28
million
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tonnes
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. In 2007, it decreased slightly to 26
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tonnes
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 and
then
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 suddenly dropped to about 13
million
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tonnes
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 in 2009. From 2009 to 2011, the
production
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 of
sugar
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 increased steadily. The consumption increased from 15
million
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tonnes
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 to 20
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million tonnes in
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 2003. From 2003, it grew from 20
million
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tonnes
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 to 23
million
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tonnes
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, showing
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million
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tonnes
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 difference in comparison with
production
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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