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Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparson

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Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparson
The pie charts give information on the proportion of British students who were able to speak other
languages
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in addition
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 to English at one university, in 2000 and 2010, expressed in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that Spanish accounted for the largest
shares
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 in
both
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 years.
Moreover
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, the proportions of German and two other
languages
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 remained unchanged in
both
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 years, registering the smallest percentages. In 2000, Spanish represented the highest percentage at 30%,
whereas
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 no other
language
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 made up 20% of the total. French and another
language
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also
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 constituted equal
shares
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,
both
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 at 15%.
However
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, German and two other
languages
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 accounted for the lowest
shares
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,
both
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 at 10%. In 2010, the share of Spanish moderately increased from 30% to 35%, making it again the leading
language
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.
Similarly
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, the proportion of another
language
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 rose to 20%, registering the second largest share.
In contrast
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,
while
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 the percentage of no other
language
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 significantly reduced from 20% to 10%, the share of French declined from 15% to 10%. Meanwhile, the
shares
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 of German and two other
languages
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 stood at 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, shares, both, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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