You have lost your credit card Write a letter to the manager of your bank In the letter explain how you lost the card ask the manger to cancel the old card and to issue you a replacement

4.5 / 9
✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Dear Sir, I'm writing to you in order to ask you to issue me a replacement card. As you know, I'm not
more owing my card
Correct word order
owing my card anymore
show examples
.
This
Linking Words
is because I mistakenly
losed
Correct your spelling
lost
it when
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
went to a
friends'
Check wording
friend's
show examples
house. The day
before
Punctuation problem
before,
show examples
I went to visit a mate whose wife
gave
Wrong verb form
had given
show examples
birth. When I arrived there, I was busy
distracted
Correct word choice
and distracted
show examples
and did not realise that I
have
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
misplaced it,
when
Correct word choice
but when
show examples
I went from there and came that I could confirm it. As a matter of fact, I started searching
but
Punctuation problem
, but
show examples
unfortunately
Add a comma
unfortunately,
show examples
I could not find it. Concerning
this
Linking Words
, I will prefer you
should
Wrong verb form
to
show examples
cancel the old one because it
has not more
Rephrase
is no longer
show examples
operational
, some one
Punctuation problem
. Someone
show examples
can find it
start
Verb problem
apply
show examples
and start operating with it
,
Punctuation problem
.
show examples
However
Linking Words
, we can clearly see that in
this
Linking Words
case
Add a comma
case,
show examples
this
Linking Words
will not be helpful for me. I would
pleade
Correct your spelling
please
you
sir
Punctuation problem
, sir
show examples
, to issue me with a brand new one so that I will be able to do my transaction as I wish. Here you
are
Punctuation problem
are,
show examples
I wish to give you my personal
my
Correct determiner usage
apply
show examples
details as soon as possible. I'm looking forward to
hear
Wrong verb form
hearing
show examples
from you! Yours sincerely! Axel.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
You answer all three parts: how you lost the card, the need to stop it, and the need for a new card. Make the story of the loss shorter and clearer. Say where and when you last saw the card.
task response
Use clear requests: “Please cancel my old card” and “Please send me a replacement card.” Also ask what you need to do next.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main point in its own short part: the lost card, stopping the old card, and getting a new card. This will make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and hard to follow. Use short sentences and simple links such as “First”, “As a result”, and “Therefore”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same time words. For example, use past time for the loss: “I lost it” and “I did not notice it.”
tone
Keep the tone polite and direct. Avoid very informal words such as “mate”. Use “friend” instead.
task response
You clearly ask the bank to cancel the old card and give you a new one.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, main parts, and a closing.
tone
You use polite forms such as “Dear Sir” and “Yours sincerely”.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: