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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows the proportion of different types of households living in
poverty
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 in Australia in 1999.
Overall
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, sole parents had the highest percentage of
people
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 living in
poverty
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,
while
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 aged
couples
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 had the lowest percentage. In total, 11% of all Australian households were living in
poverty
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. Looking at the details, 21% of sole parents lived in
poverty
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, which was the highest figure in the table.
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, 19% of single
people
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 with no
children
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 were living in
poverty
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. The proportion for
couples
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 with
children
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 was lower, at 12%. Meanwhile, 7% of
couples
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 without
children
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 were living in
poverty
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. In comparison,
single aged
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single-aged
people
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 accounted for 6% of those living in
poverty
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,
while
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 aged
couples
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 had the lowest proportion, at just 4%. Despite these differences in percentages, the number of
people
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 living in
poverty
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 was highest among
couples
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 with
children
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, at 933,000.
This
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 was followed by single
people
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 with no
children
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, at 359,000, and sole parents, at 232,000.
In addition
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, 211,000
people
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 from
couples
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 without
children
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 lived in
poverty
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, compared with 54,000
single aged
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single-aged
people
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 and 48,000 aged
couples
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, people, couples, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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