The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

The given two table data graphs compare information about
employement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
of
freedonia
the condition of being free; the power to act or speak or think without externally imposed restraints
freedom
by genders in six sectors between 1975 and 1995. A glance at the graph reveals that women manpower
were
Suggestion
has been
had been
growth
Suggestion
growing
grown
for 20 years, while numbers of male
employerer
a person or firm that employs workers
employers
employee
employer
were
fall
Suggestion
falling
significantly in 1995. It is clear from the data, Number of workers manufacturing and public sector cover their number of
employess
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
.
However
, communication and wholesale sectors shown
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
number which was tendency to
growth
Suggestion
grow
by females. Both of them
were reach
Suggestion
were reaching
a point of over 500 and 800.
Althought
Suggestion
Although
, Finance and
bankin
engaging in the business of keeping money for savings and checking accounts or for exchange or for issuing loans and credit etc.
banking
sector growth up
dramaticlly
Suggestion
drama
dramatically
by women in 1995, it
was not reach
Suggestion
didn't reach
did not reach
wasn't reaching
was not reaching
was not reached
wasn't reached
hasn't reached
number
Suggestion
the number
of males.
Public sector
Suggestion
The public sector
was a tiny among of them, but the graph
illustrate
Suggestion
illustrates
a domination of males. In conclusion, female worker joined whole of sectors, due to seen in work life and they dominate opposite gender.

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