The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.

Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.
The given two table data graphs compare information about
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the employement
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employement
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employment
of
freedonia
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Freedonia
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by
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gender
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in six sectors between 1975 and 1995. A glance at the graph reveals that
women
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women's
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manpower were growth for 20 years,
while
numbers
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the numbers
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of male
employerer
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employer
employees
were fall significantly in 1995. It is clear from the data,
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of workers
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manufacturing and public sector
cover
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covers
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their
number
of
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employees
.
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,
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the communication
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and wholesale sectors
shown
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a diffrent
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diffrent
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different
number
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numbers
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which was
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to
growth
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by
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females. Both of them
were reach
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a point of over 500 and 800.
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, Finance and
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banking
sector growth up
dramaticlly
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dramatically
by
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women in 1995, it
was not reach
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number
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of males.
Public
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sector was
a
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apply
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tiny among
of
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them, but the graph
illustrate
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a
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domination of males. In conclusion, female
worker
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workers
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joined
whole
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the whole
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of
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sectors,
due to
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in work life and they dominate opposite gender.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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