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Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. -How far do you agree? -What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?

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Nobody can deny that there are certain professionals like nurses, doctors and teachers who are essential to the fabric of society, and who should
therefore
 be rewarded
accordingly
.
However
,
this
 is seldom the case. When we look at the salaries and fees commanded by certain film stars and actresses and people who run large companies,
this
 does not seem fair.
First
 of all, not all film stars earn huge sums of money. In fact, at any one time in the UK,
for example
, roughly 80
per cent
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
 of actors are out of work and on top of
that the
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that, the
 number who are paid so-called ‘telephone number fees’ is even smaller. One must
also
 remember that the career of many actors is very short and that
therefore
 the money they earn has to be spread over many years. The same applies to company bosses. Stating a set of criteria as to how much people should be paid is not easy. The idea of performance-related pay is very much in vogue at the moment. Rewarding
people according
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people, according
 to qualifications has long been used as a yardstick for paying people, but it is not a consistently good measure. Another is years of relevant experience, but there are many cases where a younger person can perform a task better than someone with lots of experience. Whatever criteria are used to assess salaries, an on-going cycle will develop.
This
 will create pressure in other areas.
This
 considered, generally I feel that certain key professionals should have their salaries assessed by independent review bodies on an on-going basis so that they do not fall behind.
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