Sales companies should recruit people who are hungry for money as they will make the most dedicated workers. Do you think money is the driving force behind hard work? What factors should be taken into consideration when recruiting staff for sales positions?

Trading firms consider
devoted
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devoting
staff as a worker who insatiable to
money
. Whether
this
is true or other substantial aspects
makes
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make
good worker
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good workers
a good worker
as should be hired. I believe that not staff who loves
money but
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money, but
who loves
specialty
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Specialty
, motivated and loyal workers make
company
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the company
the best one.
To begin
with,
money
is undoubtedly a considerable factor for the person who is coming for earning
salary
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a salary
,
however I
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however, I
think that
this
is not aspect
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aspect is not
what moves to work harder. A person who works in anticipation of the end of the month to get a calculation will not think about the prosperity of the
company
. That type of an employee can easily betray to deceive for the sake of
money
, to leave at any moment to competitors who will offer more
money
.
For example
, at my previous job in the Sales & Marketing department one person worked well for a long time, a
company
competing with ours offered him the same position, but the salary was more by a very small percentage of his present, he left without hesitation.
This
made me believe that it is not
money
that make an employee devoted to hard work. So there are others significant factors must be considered by hiring sales representative. I think
aspect
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the aspect
an aspect
as
motivation loyalty
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motivation, loyalty
and love to own profession are more valuable.
For
example by
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example, by
recruiting motivated employee
company
can get benefit as a motivation for
team
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the team
on the whole. While
loyal member
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a loyal member
loyal members
the loyal member
of staff can give everything
of
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to
him to make his
company
better.
Moreover
, worker who loves his job and gets
satisfy
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satisfied
from what he does lift any firm to high level. To conclude, by hiring sales
candidates many
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candidates, many
factors
,
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,
the main of which can be avidity or other more
honorable
not disposed to cheat or defraud; not deceptive or fraudulent
honourable
features, should be thought out.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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