Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. -How far do you agree? -What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid

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Many people claim that important professions like doctors

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nurses

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and teachers are being underpaid and worthless compared to the film Celebrities.

However

, in my opinion Being a

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movie star

is itself hard and challenging to maintain their social and private life.

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Of all being a public figure is not easy to balance their lifestyle.Public required perfect outlook.To fit in a movie character the actor need to go through the extreme diet and physical exertion which bearing a burden that nurses and doctors and teachers might have never come through

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may cause

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a negative impact

on their health.

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to become a public eye requires great commitment and

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of course

hard work

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All the actors

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the vertical dimension of extension; distance from the base of something to the top

height

heights

weight

of success, only

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a few

can reached on the top.People

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Xan

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be influenced by them so sometime they have to do what actually they are not

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Their activities what they do

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what they eat, where they everything is being

monitired

keep tabs on; keep an eye on; keep under surveillance

monitored

mentored

by media or people

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So they have to live standard life with luxurious car

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clothes and house.Media is always after them

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seems like they do not have

private life

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a private life

or privacy.

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However, other

job holders

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as doctor, nurse, and teachers has

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a Contemporary role

for

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nations

the nation

to make the people healthy and

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educated

.The development of society and country

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

impossible without them.These are the back hone of

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the Country

.The government should provide them appropriate salary. TO recapitulate not only doctors

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nurses and

teachers but

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teachers, but

also

film star

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should

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be paid more wages as they have their different sacrifice for the nation.

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