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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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A lot of upper level management positions have been occupied by male employees despite of the fact that half of the workforce is of female in the developed nations and it is being argued that a certain number of these positions should be reserved for female.
This
 essay is in disagreement of
this
 notion because by doing so,
firstly
 we are putting a restriction on selection criteria and
secondly
, as the level of responsibilities female have in their lives, it can be a risk for the companies. By allocating a number of high level positions to female employees, companies will have an addition in the selection process for these positions. And, if in case
this
 criteria is not met by any candidate,
then
 there are chances of unfilled position for a long time.
For example
, 5 years ago, when Nestle allocated 5% of the upper-level management positions for female, 4% remained vacant for 2 years as neither they found a
women
Suggestion
woman
 candidate who satisfied other
criterias
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
criteria
 nor they could offer these positions to male employees.
Secondly
, it becomes a big risk for the companies to provide leadership responsibilities to female candidates. As women have many duties in their personal lives, so making them a decision maker of the company can be a big mistake at
sometime
Suggestion
some time
.
For example
, in Colgate, in the year 1992, 7% of female employees under performed due to their personal reasons. In
conclusion, despite of
Suggestion
conclusion, despite
 the fact that myriads of women are working these days, but due to unwillingness of adding another clause in the selection criteria of a prestigious position by the company and,
also
 the amount of responsibilities they have in their lives, it is not a right decision to block a number of high positions for female.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender diversity
  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
  • Corporate ladder
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