The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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the
percentage wise
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percentage-wise
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ratings
of the parkway
hotel
customer service based on
a
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the
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same questionnaire that was asked
to
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of
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100 different guests who visited the
hotel
in the years 2005 and 2010.
OverAll
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Overall
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from the two
charts
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it is clear that
parkway
Hotel
have
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has
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taken
customers
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customers'
customer's
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ratings
into account and worked towards striving
excellence
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for excellence
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which in turn improved its
customers
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customer's
customers'
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service
alot
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a lot
in the duration of 5 years. In 2010,
excellent
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the excellent
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rating was the least
ratings
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rating
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in the chart
which
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apply
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marked
at
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apply
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5% but it remarkably increased to 28% which is
second
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the second
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highest rating in 2015.
similarly
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,similarly
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only 14%
guests
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of guests
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felt that
hotel's
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the hotel's
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customer service was good which is the
second
least segment during
start
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the start
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of the period
where as
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whereas
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28%
visitors
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of visitors
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gave
good
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a good
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rating
in
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at
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the end of the period and it is the highest rating of the year. in contrary to good and excellent
ratings
,
satisfactory
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a satisfactory
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rating
that
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apply
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peaks up to 45% and
is
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its
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highest
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the highest
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rating in 2005
shown
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showed
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a dramatical decrease to 17% in
duration
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a duration
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of 5 years.in the same
way
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,way
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poor and very poor
ratings
were marked at 21% and 15% during the 1st year
fallen
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to 12% and 4% during
end
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the end
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of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ratings, hotel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • customer service
  • questionnaire
  • survey
  • respondents
  • rating scale
  • hospitality
  • customer satisfaction
  • comparison
  • data
  • trends
  • improvement
  • deterioration
  • feedback
  • service areas
  • hospitality industry
  • guest experience
  • satisfaction level
  • to rate
  • significant
  • frequency
  • percentage
  • chart
  • bar graph
  • pie chart
  • analysis
  • conclusion
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