The line graph below gives the information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries.The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in three countries.

The line graph below gives the information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries.The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in three countries.
The line graph shows data about
the
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unemployment
over
period
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a period
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of 14 years , from 1991 and 2005 in three respective countries,
while
the table illustrates the proportion of male and female employees in three respective countries.
It is clear that
unemployment
rates in Spain decreased dramatically
while
in
Germany
there were mild fluctuations.
In contrast
,in
Italy
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it increased considerably. In 1991
unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate was around 14
percent
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in Spain ,
while
in
the
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Germany
and Italy
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about 8 and 4
percent
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respectively.In 2005 the proportion of
unemployment
in Spain declined enormously. In
Germany
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it fluctuated and remained steady,
whereas
in Italy there was a significant increase of 8
percent
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in
unemployment
rates from 4 to 12
percent
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, between 1991 and 2005. By far the highest rate of employment for males was in Italy with 77.1
percent
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whereas
for females in
Germany
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the percentage of employees was 54.4
percent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, germany, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • workforce participation
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • trends
  • comparison
  • data analysis
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