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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Five Major Types of Fast Food Eaten in Melbourne (units) 2005Present 2025 Hamburgers403851 Fried Chicken 353745 Salads51541 Fried Rice699 Noodles689

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The table
illustrate
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illustrates
 the amounts consummation of different type of fast food in Melbourne in the years 2005, 2020 and 2025. Overall,
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hamburger
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the hamburger
 was the most fast food consumed in
beginning period
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the beginning period
, while the salad was the least, in the end of the period
hamburger
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 is steady the heights
rate
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, whereas the fried rice and noodles were lowest
rate
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. In 2005, it’s clear that
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hamburger
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the hamburger
 is the significant
rate
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 about 40%, fried chicken is
secondly
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 with 35%,
however
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 6% is for both type fried rice and noodles, while
salad
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the salad
 was the lowest
rate
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 about 5%.
In
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At
 present,
hamburger
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 consumed about 38% and
this
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percentage
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 upward trend about 12%,
however
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 fried chicken is
rise
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rising
 about 2% in 2020 with
percentage
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 37% and reach 45% in 2025, salad type increase dramatically with
percentage
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 15%
in
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at
 present and
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percentage
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the percentage
 became higher in 2025 with 41%. Fried rice in 2020 and 2025 had
same
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the same rate
rate
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 with 9%, in other hand noodles had 8% in 2020 and increase
rate
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 about 1% in 2025.
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