The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The pie charts demonstrate the different sources in terms of producing
energy
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in France in 1995 and 2005.
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,
it is clear that
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Coal, gas and petrol were the biggest
source
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to produce
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producing
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energy
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in both years,
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nuclear and others accounted for the least amount of
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.
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, in all types of
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production
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there was minimal change over the
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period. In 1995, 29.80% of
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was
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produced from coal,
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in 2005, it accounted for 30.93%, which was the largest
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production source of France in both years. On the other side, by producing 29.63% and 30.30% in 1995 and 2005, respectively, gas secured the
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position to produce
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. Meanwhile, Petro accounted for 29.70% in 1995, and
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proportion dropped to 19.55% in 2005. Again, nuclear and other sources represented 6.40% and 4.90% of the total
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production in 1995,
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These figures were almost double in 2005, 10.10% and 9.10%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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