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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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 usage in
percentange
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percentage
 of three different methods, namely Industrial
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, Agricultural
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 and Domestic
use
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in
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 6 continents of the world.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that Central Asia has by far the highest
water
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 usage in Agriculture,
while
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 South
America
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 and
Europe
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 have the highest in domestic and Industrial
use
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 respectively. As the charts show, North and South
America
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 and
Europe
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 have more Domestic
use
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 compared to other areas, with a value of 13% and 19% for North
America
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 and South
America
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 respectively and 15% for
Europe
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.
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, North
America
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 and
Europe
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 have more
water
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 for
industrail
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industrial
use
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, with a percentage of almost
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apply
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half for North
America
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, and 53% for
Europe
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.
By contrast
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, the
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 usages in
African
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the African
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 and Asian continents are almost the same, with a percentage of roughly 80-88% for all of them.
Furthermore
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, South
America
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 has
a more balanced values
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a more balanced value
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 than any continent, with its Industrial and Agricultural
use
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 of 10 and 71% respectively.
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