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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010.
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The chart illustrates the number of British
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student
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students
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 at one university in England who were capable to speak different
languages
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with
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in
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 English in 2000 and 2010.
Firstly
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, The Number of students who were able to speak no other
language
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 and friends
were
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was
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 20% and 15% in 2000, but in the
year
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 2010
decrease
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of
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by
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 10% and 10%.
However
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, the
student
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 who speaks
German
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the German
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language
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 is
same
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the same
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 in both
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year
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years
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 which is 10%.
Although
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, The
student
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 who has been able to speak Spanish, other
languages
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 and
to
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apply
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other
languages
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 were 30%, 15% and 10% in 2000, by the
year
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 2010 all the three
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languages
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languages'
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percentage
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percentages
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 increased by 5%. In conclusion, only the number of
student
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 who is speaking, German
language
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 were
same
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the same
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 in both
year
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 but
other
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the other
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language
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 shows
the
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a
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 trend of upward and downward.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words student, languages, language, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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