The graph on the right shows the unemployment figures amongst women of different age groups.
The graph shows percentages of unemployed
women
at 8 ages
. It can be clearly seen that the
ages
18 and 45 have the highest unemployment
rate.
According to
the graph, among the ages
18, 20, 25, 30 and 35, the youngest women
have the
highest unemployment
percentage (15%). 20 year-old
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20-year-old
women
have much lower unemployment
figures (about 10%), and percentages drop even lower (to 5 percent
) for those aged 25 and 35.
There is a slight increase for those aged 30, where the Change the spelling
per cent
unemployment
rate reaches 6 percent
.
The peak value is recorded amongst Change the spelling
per cent
45 year-old
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45-year-old
women
, and all the remaining ages
have much
lower figures: 8% at age 55 and 9% at age 65.
To sum up
, the figures for most ages
are relatively uniform and change from 5 to 9 %, with rare
exceptions such
as the ages
18 and 45.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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