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Some employers of er their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staf healthier and thus more ef ective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach a conclusion.

Employers are always seeking ways to enhance their employees’ productivity, and
subsidising
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Subsidising
 healthy pursuits may be one way of achieving
this
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. There are arguments on both sides,
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however
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However
, which we will discuss here. On the one hand, it might be said that if workers are fitter and less stressed, their working time
will
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Will
 be more efficient, leading to higher levels of output and service.
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, the work/life balance of the staff will hopefully be improved, because their leisure time will be more fulfilling.
This
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 may even be more motivating than pay increments, perks, or financial rewards
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 as bonuses or incentives which may be hard to attain.
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, feeling healthier may lead to better job
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satisfaction which is
 itself a motivating factor.
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, the problem with
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 leisure-based subsidies is that their efficacy is virtually impossible to quantify.
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, with target-related payments, employers can at least see
whether
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Whether
 the objectives are reached or not. It might
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 be said that, if
this
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 budget was spent on (
for instance
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) on the job training or day release programmes, the employees would achieve better career progression and have better job prospects. These matters are all easier to measure, especially in performance reviews and appraisals, and may even help to reduce the risk of redundancy if the company restructures, downsizes or outsources its workforce. Overall, it seems that, while health-related subsidies are superficially attractive, the lack of
measurability
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Measurability
 is a substantial drawback. Spending funds
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for
 ongoing training would appear to be a better use of company or Human Resources budgets.

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