In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

Nowadays teenagers preferred to
hangout
Suggestion
hang out
with their friends and the spend most of the time together which lead to have less time with their family. Because they find staying with playmate more fun as they have the same mentality
moreover they
Accept comma addition
moreover, they
want to have freedom away from the family.
This
changes its because of big gab between the parents and the teenagers as the parents busy most of the day at work which supporting the ideas of the youngest to
saty
stay the same; remain in a certain state
stay
away from home. Unlike others I don't agree to force
the youngest
Suggestion
the young
to stay at home or to spend
mor
used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs
more
time with their family because it will lead to
big mass
Suggestion
the big mass
big masses
in terms on building their personality and minimize the trust between each other. To conclude the topic, the youngest should have the
choise
the person or thing chosen or selected
choice
chose
choose
to be with their friends and the parents should have a good thing to interact the teenagers to stay at home.

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