The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.

The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on

different daily activities.
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priority versus
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The table illustrates a comparison between gender
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spending
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hours
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which appear sometimes slightly or completely different depending on
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of activity and gender. First of all, gender
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and differences have
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impact on
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and numbers of
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activities
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. As
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clear for the first group
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,
women
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spend slightly higher
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than
men
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in
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sleeping 8,8 to 8,.4.
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record
slightly
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higher percentage than
men
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in resting and personal
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as well
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. For
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spending
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on hobbies and games, and
sports man
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have higher percentages than
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, (37 and ,13) and( ,23 , 7 )severally. Meanwhile, reading is pointing to
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position in
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women
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record
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than
man
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, 26 and, 23 respectively .obviously
men
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give more
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about all leisure than
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a woman
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woman
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(5, 25)( , 4, 53 ) one by one .
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second
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group of
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which shows job performance and obligation and subject research , housework , children
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, charity work and travel ,
men
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achieve upper rates in employment and study (3,45) ,and (2,26) for
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,
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travel , 1,32 to 1,22
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as
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had the highest rate in housework 3 to 1,4 and children
care
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is doubled than man ,32 to ,15 individually . In conclusion,
men
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give superior priority to work , ease and relaxation ,and travel
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to
women
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who give senior / greater attention to house
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and rising children

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, activities, hours, care with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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