Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of work that they do? How far do you agree? What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?

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Among various professions in the society, the people who are connected with human lives, education are being underpaid; compared to industries like films and CEO’s of
multi national
involving or operating in several nations or nationalities
multinational
companies. In
this
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essay I would like to express, that I do strongly believe people who are into public
helath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
, education are not treated to standards of importance. No doubt; health, study sector professionals are not recognized for the services offering to the public.Let me explain in detail. Both the jobs required human touch, precision, focus and patience levels. A small
neglience
failure to act with the prudence that a reasonable person would exercise under the same circumstances
negligence
could cost a life of an individual and career.
For instance
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, doctors attending a bypass surgery, should come out of the theatre with a promising
results
Suggestion
result
to the patient and the relatives.In case of academics, it is the responsibility of
lectureres
a speech that is open to the public
lectures
to provide society with young and
intellictual
of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind
intellectual
intellectually
master minds. As both the skills are complex; involving
humans
Suggestion
human
human's
life, need appreciation to the level of
afforts
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
effort
. If we
contemplete
look at thoughtfully; observe deep in thought
contemplate
contemplated
the persons from film industry, lot of remuneration to
heros
a man distinguished by exceptional courage and nobility and strength
heroes
heirs
hers
are being paid for the sake of entertainment. In the same way there are few
industralists
someone who manages or has significant financial interest in an industrial enterprise
industrialists
, being paid at a huge
stakes
Suggestion
stake
of the company. There should be an equilibrium in deciding the budget across multiple organizations. Experience
,
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,
service oriented and success rates are the factors required to justify different occupations in the society.
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Therefore it
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Therefore, it
is high time to improvise the
budgetory
of or relating to a budget
budgetary
norms of every industry, looking into the complexities and tediousness involved in the process of execution.
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