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Women and men are commonly sees as having different strengths and weaknesses.It it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

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Since forever people believe that men and women have different strengths and weaknesses, because of which they think in
few
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a few
 of the professions males or females are not suitable. In my opinion, both genders stand equal to each other,
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 a job cannot decide the
gender
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 of an individual. The
gender
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 of a person does not prove the strengths and weaknesses, but the individual's talent, intelligence and
hard work does
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hard work to do
hard work do
. Though in many backward places girls are not given equal opportunities as boys are given. Due to which the government tries to make special quotas for girls so that they can come forward and explore their talent and work for their country. As it is seen, Kalpana Chawla, Kiran Bedi, Mischelle Obama, Hillary Clinton and any more have proved that women are not inferior from men and have become an inspiration to
many other ladies to
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many other ladies
 come forward. Females are generally considered to be weak in professions where huge body strength and labour work is involved. But like Mary Kom the famous international boxing champion and ladies working in defence department have proved that they can perform any type of task.
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, males are generally not seen in beauty parlours and saloons or even in the teaching jobs. The society thinks these are feminine jobs, but they
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 forget that there are many professors and famous hair stylists who are males and are breaking the stereotypes. To conclude, we cannot decide the talent, power or flaws of a person by looking at the
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.
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, a
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 cannot decide the occupation of an individual. It is the capability of a person to perform a job,
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, it is not correct to exclude males or females from particular professions because of their
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal views
  • inherent biases
  • professional capabilities
  • gender inclusivity
  • equal opportunities
  • diversity
  • unique perspectives
  • physical attributes
  • psychological attributes
  • workplace adaptations
  • modern advancements
  • legal frameworks
  • gender discrimination
  • ethical implications
  • career opportunities
  • case studies
  • real-world examples
  • traditionally dominated
  • successful outcomes
  • atypical roles
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