The pia charts bellow show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pia charts bellow show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
The two
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charts reveal the comparison of five types of
energy
production in France in 1995 and in 2005.
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, it is
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seen that
both
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of
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two
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years , the most important production of
energy
resources were coal and gas , and they were
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half of the whole
energy
resours
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resources
,
while
nuclear and
other type
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of
energy
resours
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resources
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produced the least proportions of
energy
in France. If we look at
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,
energy
was produced by coal with 29, 80% in the
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first
year and
this
was
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very slight increase of about only 1% to 30.9% in 2005 in France. And
this
event was the same in 1995 gas produced 29,63% , that was 30,1% after ten years.
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energy
resources which
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nuclear and other
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resours
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resources
increased
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to
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5% and their proportions of
energy
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suitably
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nuclear
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10,10% ,
while
other resources 9,10%. But petrol was one of
sources
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of
energy
which decreased in production from 28,27% to 19, 55%, perspective in 1995 and in 2005.

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