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In some countries, there are some laws that ban employers from rejecting job applicants only because of their age. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Rejection of applications only owing to the applicant's
age
 is banned in some countries. Since it would be an unfair base admission on
age
. I, for one, believe it as the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 development and I would like to address the positive impacts like having more job opportunities and the negative that can bring downsides for both companies and the employees themselves. The jobless will get more opportunities to get a new career. As the proportion of unemployed people is increasing drastically,
nevertheless
, through
This
 law, there would be more chances for them to get a new job, which will directly lower the percentage of crimes, as crimes are mostly done by the jobless and frustrated.
Furthermore
, it will directly lead to the nation's development because as the more people will get hired by companies, the more it will affect the GDP of the respective country, which will result in the growth of both the individual and constituency.
For instance
, Malaysia has applied
This
 law, due to which their youth and the older generation are getting occupation and it produced a tremendous outcome. Some companies require experienced, hard_working and enthusiastic adults. One serious problem that can arise from prohibiting the companies to refuse their job applicants due to their
age
 is it can lead to serious company loss. It is because some profession positions require adequate experiences which commonly owned by those in productive ages (30-35 years old).
Therefore
, in my opinion, when it is restricted to take
age
 into account for selecting new employees, the companies will be dominated by unqualified staff.
Consequently
, the companies will be adverse as they should pay several amounts of dollars for that employee who possesses neither skill nor the ability to favour the companies' outcomes. In conclusion, there should be the availability of placement for any
age
 group because it would be resulting in a decrease in the unemployment rate, and
also
, it confines the company to recruit potential staff based on their need.

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