The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about how much fund
earned
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were earned
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from exporting
in
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several
items
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in a country in the two years (2015 and 2016) and units
was
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measured in
billion
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dollars
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. The table chart illustrates the proportion changes in the values of each product of exports in 2016, compared with 2015.
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, almost the
items
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in 2016 had the highest amount of cash
than
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that
in
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2015 except engineered
products
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. Simultaneously, the categories related to textiles had the highest ratio of rise from 2015 to 2016. First of all, there were about 72
billion
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dollars
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which were gained from exporting petroleum
products
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in 2016,
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figure was higher than that in 2015 (around 61
billion
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dollars
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). Meanwhile, the amount of money earned in 2016 still was higher than that in 2015 in exporting engineered
goods
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with around 61 billowing
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and nearly 58
billion
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dollars
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respectively.
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, there was a distinctive difference
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two
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previous
items
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that
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the number of payments earned in 2015 was higher than that in 2016 in exporting gems and jewellery with almost 42
billion
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dollars
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and nearly 41
dollars
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.
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, the amount of capital earned in both
2015
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the 2015
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and 2016 years had about the same figure with around 31
billion
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dollars
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in agricultural
products
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.
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, around 26
billion
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dollars
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and almost 31
billion
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dollars
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were the
number
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of cash earned in exporting textile
goods
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in 2015 and 2016 year, respectively.
Secondly
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, the proportion changes in almost categories tended to rise from 2015 to 2016 excluded gems and jewellery
goods
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.
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, textile
goods
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had the highest proportion
changes
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of changes
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in 2016 compared to 2015
to
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15.24
percent
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,
while
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there was only
0.81
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a 0.81
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% raise belonged to agricultural
products
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. The petroleum
products
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and engineered
goods
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had the
increase
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percentage with 3% and 8.5%, respectively.
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, the ratio of gems and jewellery
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decreased
5.18
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by 5.18
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percent
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per cent
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in 2016 compared to 2015.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words items, billion, dollars, products, goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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