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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the amount of
population
 in the past, current and projected from 1990 to 2050
of
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in
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China
 and
India
. In general, both
China
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China's
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 and
India
’s
population
 have an upward trend.
At
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In
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 the beginning,
China
 had an extremely huge
number of
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apply
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population
with
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apply
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1.15
billions
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billion
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 people. Contrary to that,
India
 stood at 0.85
billions
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billion
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. In spite of having a higher
population
 than
India
,
China
 increased slowly in 20 years from 1990 to 2010.
Otherwise
, the number of
Indian
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Indians
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 shot up incredibly fast,
reach
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reaching
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 1.2
billions
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billion
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 in 2010. In the
next
 10 years from 2010 to now-2020, the speed of growth of the two
countries’s
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countries’
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population
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populations
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 was slightly slow down, but
Indian
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India
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 still rise by approximately 200
millions
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million
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. From 2020 to 2050, it is predicted that
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the Indian
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Indian
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India
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 and Chinese will
equal
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be equal
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 in 2030. After that,
India
 will take place to reach a peak of the graph with 1.6
billions
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billion
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,
while
China
 will decrease to 1.4
billions
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billion
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, india, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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