The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British prison system. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The first figure shows the percentage of criminal convictions in the UK that occur among
men
and
women
of different ages,
while
the second compares the percentage of male and female prisoners in British* gaols. It is clear from the graphs that most convicted criminals in the UK are in their early twenties and that
men
are much more likely to be convicted than
women
. The male conviction rate increases sharply from just 2
percent
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among 10 –
year
– olds to about 16
percent
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among 20 –
year
– olds. Meanwhile, the rate of convictions among
female
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rises from 0
percent
at the age of 10 to around 5
percent
at 20.
After
this
, the percentage of criminal convictions for both
men
and
women
decreases.
According to
the figures, 60 –
year
– old
men
only commit about 2
percent
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of all crimes and 60 –
year
– old
women
do not commit any crime at all. Not surprisingly, the second graph shows that 96
percent
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of all prisoners are
men
while
only 4
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percent
are female.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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