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Women and man are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Therefore, some people believe that it is right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is a view that physiological features of male and female should be taken into account certain professions. They argue that people are more productive and
efficent
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
, when they are working according to their
gender
 orientated profession.
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 totally disagree with
this
 statement, because it is unfair to limit people according to their
gender
 and will be
percieved
detected by instinct or inference rather than by recognized perceptual cues
perceived
 as
discrimination
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discriminatory
. Previously, in recent centuries
woman
 were not allowed to
work
 in those professions which were accounted as not female suitable ones. The revolutionary changes in freedom, made
rights
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the rights
 of
woman
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a woman
women
 equal
,
Accept space
,
 which
contributed rapid
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contributed to rapid
economical
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economic
 and industrial growth in the fifties of 20-
th
definite article
the
 century. Today, men and
woman
 are in
overwhelming majority
Suggestion
the overwhelming majority
 of cases are able to
work
 without any restrictions.
Moreover
, the experts
points
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point
 that in a
workplaces
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workplace
 with both
gender
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genders
, the level of motivation and results of
work
are
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is
 significantly better. The main disadvantage of restrictions according to
gender
 is
rise
Suggestion
a rise
the rise
 of inequality. Individual choose
career path
Suggestion
a career path
the career path
career paths
 on
their
Suggestion
their gender, not
gender
 not on
indvidual
a human being
individual
individuals
 traits.
Thus
,
in other words
 make borders in development which affects in
common wealth
Suggestion
the common wealth
 of society,
Undoubetly
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Undoubtedly
, some jobs require physical or
phycological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
physiological
 features which make certain
gender
 more prone to it.
For instance
, mining and
work
 in a power plant are dangerous to health, in
this
 order
woman
 are restricted to prevent future consequences on a child during a pregnancy.
Finally
, it is clear that in
modern world
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the modern world
a modern world
 we shouldn't face with discrimination based on
gender
. To prevent
this
authorities
Suggestion
authority
have
Suggestion
has
 to constantly monitor
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 market and punish in case of breaking the rules.
However
, several occupations require special physical features which make certain
gender
 more prone to accomplish task.
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