The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts are illustrating the amount of eight different

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of industrial sectors, which were contributed

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Turkey’s economy in 2000 and 2016.

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2000 the greatest sector

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belonged to Agricultural activities;

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accounted for the highest proportion of economic contribution in 2016. On the one hand, in the 16-year period, Agriculture, Leisure and hospitality and Government experienced a decrease of 10%, 3% and 3%, respectively.

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, all the other sectors witnessed an increase from 2000 to 2016. Construction saw the most considerable rise, from 3% in 2000 to 10% in 2016.

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developed by 2%.

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