Sales companies should recruit people who are hungry for money as they will make the most dedicated workers. Do you think money is the driving force behind hard work? What factors should be taken into consideration when recruiting staff for sales positions?

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Most

people

work

hard, struggle from hand to mouth to graduate with high score so they can find

good

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a good job

good jobs

job

with high earning and vast allowance packages so they can provide every comfort and luxury

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for

their family. Along with working in

largest

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larger

, high grossing and best performing company to get good experience, earning

high

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a high salary

salary

also

very important for

job

satisfaction. An employee

always desire

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always desires

work

in a profit –making and richest company where he can

work

with friendly, encouraging and supportive staff, a good working experience and high wage with health insurance, travel allowance, paid sick leave, holidays and vacations.

Furthermore

, if you will earn

good

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a good salary

salary

then

there will no need to do part-time

job

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

their family expenses and can spend extravagant and happy time 70with them after busy office schedule. A research was done in American joint committee in 2015, 40 people

work

in their desire department with less

salary

while 40 people choose their desire

salary

with

tough working environment

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the tough working environment

. After 1 year, people working in their selective department need to do part-time or extra

job

to complete their family requirement were more stressful and exhausted while people choose high wage get

promotion

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a promotion

by their full focus and hard

work

on one

job

. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that money should be basic and primary concern of every employee while he get one or more

job

opportunities. Because every need of life related to buying new mobile, car, house, providing better education to the children, or planning

foreign visit

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a foreign visit

can only get by money.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

265 words

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Sales companies should recruit people who are hungry for money as they will make the most dedicated workers. Do you think money is the driving force behind hard work? What factors should be taken into consideration when recruiting staff for sales positions?

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🔶Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?

The image explains how Pu-erh ripe tea and raw tea are made

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Sales companies should recruit people who are hungry for money as they will make the most dedicated workers. Do you think money is the driving force behind hard work? What factors should be taken into consideration when recruiting staff for sales positions?