The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.
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The graph illustrates the information of the employees working in different employment fields of the Republic of Freedonia based on the basis of gender (Male and
Females
). It is found that Fix the agreement mistake
Female
number
Correct article usage
the number
Change preposition
of women's
women's
working in Change noun form
women
Public
(Non-Defence) and Wholesale and Retail trade Correct article usage
the Public
field
is higher than compared to Fix the agreement mistake
fields
male
, Fix the agreement mistake
males
whereas
the count of men tend
to work in Finance and Defence Correct pronoun usage
who tend
sector
is more than Correct pronoun usage
that of
of
women.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, the number of females working in Non-defence
area is over 500 Correct article usage
the Non-defence
thousand
which is about 70 percent
Change the spelling
per cent
Correct quantifier usage
more than
than
of Change preposition
apply
male
working in Fix the agreement mistake
males
this
sector
, similar with
Change preposition
to
Wholesale
and retail trade Correct article usage
the Wholesale
field
. In Fix the agreement mistake
fields
defence
Correct article usage
the defence
sector
nearly 210 Add a comma
,sector
thousand
of
males occupancy is found, than of women Change preposition
apply
that is
just about 50 thousand
. In banking
Correct article usage
the banking
sector
also
there is dominance
of males found (450 Add an article
the dominance
a dominance
thousand
).
In manufacturing
Correct article usage
the manufacturing
sector
males and womens
both share Correct your spelling
women
same
spaces.Correct article usage
the same
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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