The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustrates
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the proportion of British
students
who speak other languages
besides
English at one university in
year
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the year
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2000 and 2010. We could figure
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apparent differences easily. First of all, only 10
percent
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of the
students
could not speak another
language
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of
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English in 2010, the number is half of the data in 2000, which means more and more people are bilingual in at least one foreign
language
,
that
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is the biggest change in
this
decade. There are
also
some slight increase and decrease,
for example
,
students
who choose French as a
second
language
dropped
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5
percent
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from 15 to 10
while
the proportion
Spanish
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of Spanish
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speaker went up from 30
percent
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per cent
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to 35
percent
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per cent
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, there is no doubt that Spanish is still the most popular choice.
In addition
, the percentage of
students
who speak some small
language
and who master two foreign languages both experienced an increase of 5
percent
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,
that
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which
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is a good signal. And it is worth noting that, the group who speak German is the only one in these groups whose data remain the same.
To sum up
, we can draw the conclusion that British
students
had been more willing to learn other sorts of languages than before.
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  • proportion
  • multilingualism
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  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
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