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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 the proportion of British
students
 who speak other languages
besides
 English at one university in
year
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the year
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 2000 and 2010. We could figure
some
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out some
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 apparent differences easily. First of all, only 10
percent
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per cent
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 of the
students
 could not speak another
language
 despite
of
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English in 2010, the number is half of the data in 2000, which means more and more people are bilingual in at least one foreign
language
,
that
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which
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 is the biggest change in
this
 decade. There are
also
 some slight increase and decrease,
for example
,
students
 who choose French as a
second
language
 dropped
for
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by
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 5
percent
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per cent
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 from 15 to 10
while
 the proportion
Spanish
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of Spanish
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 speaker went up from 30
percent
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per cent
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 to 35
percent
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per cent
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, there is no doubt that Spanish is still the most popular choice.
In addition
, the percentage of
students
 who speak some small
language
 and who master two foreign languages both experienced an increase of 5
percent
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per cent
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,
that
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which
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 is a good signal. And it is worth noting that, the group who speak German is the only one in these groups whose data remain the same.
To sum up
, we can draw the conclusion that British
students
 had been more willing to learn other sorts of languages than before.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, percent, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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