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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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All the people
work
 for getting wage in order to fulfil the basic necessities of life.It is said by some individuals that every employee should get
equal
Suggestion
an equal salary
salary
 in order to give respect to all the individuals in any
company
. I partially agree with the statement and my viewpoints will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs On one hand, if all the persons will get equal
salary
 in any
company
then
 no one will feel superior or inferior in any particular organisation and all will
work
 more
efficently
with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
 without creating any conflict.
For instance
, when any school or
company
 does not equally increase the pay of employees
then
 it
put
Suggestion
puts
bad impact
Suggestion
a bad impact
onthe
Suggestion
on the
 working capacity of any person some of the persons feel discouraged and stressed
.
Accept space
.
On the other hand
,
salary
 is increased on the basis of performance and capabilities of a person. If all the workers will get
similar
Suggestion
a similar salary rise
salary
 rise
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 those who do not
work
 efficiently will become more lethargic and those who
work
 honestly will
fell
Suggestion
feel
felt
dissatified
in a state of sulky dissatisfaction
dissatisfied
 and
this
 will bring
disasterous
(of events) having extremely unfortunate or dire consequences; bringing ruin
disastrous
 results to any particular organisation.If all the seniors and juniors will get
equal wage rate
Suggestion
an equal wage rate
then
 juniors will
not respect to others
Suggestion
not respect others
not respect for others
not respect for for others
. To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write some laws should be formulated in any
company
 in order to treat them equally rather than increasing similar
salary
.
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