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The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British prison system.

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The line graph given compares the proportion of criminal convictions in male and female offenders varying from 10 to 60 years old. The pie chart describes how much the British
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 inmates of both sexes are. Overall, it can be seen that the proportions of male offenders in the British prison system and those convicted in the court outnumber that of their female counterparts. In the pie chart, while the rate of male prisoners accounts for a significant amount, at 96%, only four in one hundred prison inmates are female.
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, in the line graph, the proportion of men who offend the law is much higher than that of women regardless of their age. Apparently, the percentages of both male and female offenders are at their peaks when criminals are 20 years old. The 10-year-old and 60-year-old age groups commit
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