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Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary than ordinary workers. Employers' organizations say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What is your opinion?

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Dear Reggie, It is great to know that you are intending to go for a camping
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 in the coming
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 thank you for taking me into confidence for some advice. I think you should take the opportunity and make it
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. I think that you should go for a camping
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 because from my past camping experience, I can say that you will quite enjoy it. After all,
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 will offer you the opportunity to take a long walk in the wilderness and observe nature in its true habitat. You can
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 go to a nearby lake for fishing or swimming which you have always wanted to do. But, the best thing about
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 will be that it will actually improve your mood and rejuvenate you like nothing else. Having said that,
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, there are some disadvantages of
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 as well,
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 as sharing bathrooms with other people at the campsite, bad weather, and dealing with bug bites and dangerous animals. Anyway, I
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 would have loved to go camping with you
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, but since my cousin is visiting me from abroad
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, I will have to give up on that idea. Anyway, I
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 would have loved to go camping with you
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, but since my cousin is visiting me from abroad
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, I will have to give up on that idea. Take care and stay fine. Warm wishes, Carlos
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