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The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph shows economic
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 over a 15-year period ending 2010. The pie charts give a breakdown of household spending in four separate years over the same period. Viewed together, there appears to be a relationship between economic
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 and patterns of spending. According to the graph, economic
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 began at a modest 1
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, rose modestly,
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 remained more or less steady at about 2
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 until 2003. It grew sharply and peaked at nearly 5
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 in 2005,
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 fell dramatically to -5
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 in 2008, before recovering to 1
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 in 2010. Over the same period, changes in patterns of spending were evident. In periods of low or negative
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, spending on housing and food accounted for a larger proportion of total household expenditure than in times of relative prosperity.
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, in times of economic
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, spending on less essential items
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 as travel, entertainment and clothing tended to increase.
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 is particularly evident in the chart for 2005 where together these three items appear to account for over 15
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 of total spending. In summary, the figures show that in times of hardship, households spend a greater proportion of their income on necessities whereas, in times of prosperity, more is spent on non-essentials
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