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The debate on cash versus credit card has been going on for some time. Credit is still a fairly new concept within the history of finance; so many people would rather stick with paper money. According to you, which is a better payment method, cash or credit?

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Cash
 and
Credit
card
 has
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ame demand
now-a-days
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.
Cash
 is used to buy things that
meets
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the
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human needs. We
also
 have
cash
 in a
credit
card
. In my view, both are the best ways. All of us may not have
credit
 cards. As we know that India is a developing country, some below
povery
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poverty
 line
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 no idea what is
c
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a
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redit
card
. So they use
cash
 to buy.
Credit
 cards are used basically to pay enormous amounts.
For instance
, if we want to buy basic groceries, we will have to pay
cash
instead
 of using
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redit
card
. If we visit a vegetable vendor, he may not be able to provide us
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a
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redit
card
 system. In
such
 a situation we definitely need to pay it by
cash
. But if we are using the online transactions, we may use our
credit
 cards. If in a situation now, we see that our bank accounts are being hacked which is why it is not that safe to use
c
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a
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redit
card
.
However
, if we pay
cash
 we would stick to
a
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paper money.
Also
, the poor cannot be able to access the
credit
card
 system. But if we consider a situation where students want to access online classes or coaching, their payment would be through online. There is no chance here to pay it by
cash
. So
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 conclude that
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 both the ways are useful for better payment. It is always said that carrying
cash
 is difficult and unsafe rather than holding a
card
 sometimes.
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