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The debate on cash versus credit card has been going on for some time. Credit is still a fairly new concept within the history of finance; so many people would rather stick with paper money. According to you, which is a better payment method, cash or credit? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is often argued about the benefits of
credit
card
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instead
 of paper money. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and think
cash
 is a better
payment
 method rather than
credit
.
First
 of all,
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 believe that majority of
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opulation in the world is not educated as much as to use
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a
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redit
card
. they are not aware of
this
mode
 of
payment
 yet. Many of them
doest'nt
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doesn't
 have
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 account in the bank.
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the daily wagers who got their wage on
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an
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ourly or daily basis like the labours, they only get
cash
 and make transaction only through that. they can't use
c
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a
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redit
card
 because they are not aware of
this
 and money can be looted from them if they have
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redit
card
 as they are less educated. That's why it is more favourable for them to choose
cash
 as their
mode
 of
payment
.
Secondly
, there are
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ot of security issues in using
c
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a
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redit
card
.
payment
 through
this
mode
 is
also
 not secure in today's world when there
is
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 hackers all around.
For example
 when a person is not educated enough if he/she
receive
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 a call from fraud asking OTP or something related to that he/she may give that to the agent because of less of awareness
shichb
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which
 results
in to
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 loss of their money.
Thus
, security issues may compromise with
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redit
mode
 of
payment
. To conclude,
i
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 strongly believe that
cash
mode
 if
payment
 is easily accessible to the majority of
p
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opulation rather than
credit
mode
 of
payment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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