The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Those pictures illustrate how
cement
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is produced, and how concrete is made.
Overall
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, the process of making
cement
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uses some tools, as the production of concrete requires only a mixer.
Also
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the production of
cement
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consists of several stages.
The first step is
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that limestone and clay are crushed into pieces of powder. After that, the powder is mixed using a mixer before passing into a rotating heater. In the rotating heater a material is heated. After using a grinder, get
cement
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which is bagged into bags.
According to
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the
second
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picture, in order to make concrete, water is used at 10%,
cement
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at 15%, sand at 25% and gravel 50% which are combined into a concrete mixer. The pie charts below show the average
household
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expenditures (costs) in
Japan
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and
Malaysia
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in the year 2010. The diagrams demonstrate the mean
household
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spending in
Japan
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and
Malaysia
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in 2010. The components of these expenditures include: housing,
transport
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,
food
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,
health
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care
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and other
goods
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and
services
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. The diagrams demonstrate the mean
household
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spending on housing,
transport
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,
food
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,
health
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care
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and other
goods
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and
services
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in
Japan
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and
Malaysia
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in 2010. In the first diagram,
goods
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and
services
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accounted for the highest in the
household
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budget in
Japan
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, at 29%.
This
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was followed by
food
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, housing and
transport
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with: 24%, 21% and 20% respectively
while
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the least expenditure was on
health
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care
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at 6%.
However
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, housing was seen to top the budget spendings of households in
Malaysia
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at 34%.
This
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was followed by
food
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, other
goods
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and
services
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and
transport
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with: 27%, 26% and 10 % respectively. Households in
Malaysia
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expended their least budget spendings on
health
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care
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.
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,
Japan
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spent twice of
Malaysia
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’s expenditures on both
transport
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and
health
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care
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.
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