Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?

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the workforce of companies, especially in developed countries. Despite

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, fewer management careers are available for them.

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as managers should be considered.

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they have the aptitude in order to manage numerous issues. In today’s world, all of the people without the importance of gender are working with each other, so

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have the ability to solve big problems and behave exactly as the men in head positions do. They have had striking achievements in various fields,

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details.

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any other social assignments that they have. Noticing the potential of

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they are successful because of their

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, power, and patience. In conclusion,

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they are able to have the best performance in various tasks.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?

Your opinion

More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are some possible solutions?

Some people think that only the government can make significant changes in society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?

Some people consider prices as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree

Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?