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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. It is right to exclude males or females from certain profession because of their gender?

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It is widely claimed that males and females have different strengths and weaknesses;
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, some occupations should be limited to specific
gender
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 rather than others. In my perspective,
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, wherever and any professions possible,
gender
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 evenly should be encouraged.
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 with, there are some logical arguments for those who believe that why certain posts
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remain predominantly male and female.
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, several jobs require physical strength,
skillful
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 and highly
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. Firefighters or coal mining and quarrying,
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, should be mainly done by men.
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, flight attendant,
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, is suited for
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gender
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 because
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 needs to be polite, sprightly, elegant, and quickly respond in all situations,those have strongly
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 females.
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, in the vast majority of circumstances,
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 equality in a range of works created immense benefits. In fact, men and women can bring moderately different viewpoints and procedures to
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. Take female police officers as an example, may have a greater understanding and knowledge of domestic violence or childhood abuse,
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 in having a better range of solutions for coping with
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 issue.
Pediatrician
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 male is able to have a better grasp and comprehensive to young boys character to take care and treat for them precisely. In conclusion, certain vocations might be necessary to be exclusively related to a particular
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such
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 as customer services and manual labour. In modern society,
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, people can have greater freedom of choice in terms of
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employment
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.
Gender
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 balance brings
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 positives and profits for individuals and countries.
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