Many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I have no idea about developed countries because my country is a developing country and I am going to describe it in my way. I totally disagree to share an exact percentage of
women
compared to
men
at the management level or higher. The reason is not about sex but it is about performance and attitude. Nowadays, the world is free and people have equality. No matter what sex are we, some ,way occupations are not suitable for every gender
such
as soldiers, police, and worker in the construction business because the physical body between
men
and
women
,
men
can be stronger.
On the other hand
, the woman can do an exquisite and caring job like a nurse.
For example
, a site construction has 100 workers 80 are
men
and 20 are
women
then
they need to have 10 foremen and all of the.m are
men
this
is fair because
men
have more skill able than
women
worker For the percentage of high-level positions are filled by
men
this
sentence is not collected in my notion because the executive and board committees usually choose the person who can lead the company by his/her competence and royalty. In conclusion, ladies and gentlemen are
same
Change the article
the same
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level
Change the noun form
levels
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the thing
that is
different is their ability, talent, eagerness and enthusiasm. In my opinion, companies always select the best candidate to be a manager by these skills.
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  • social equality
  • gender equality
  • empowerment
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  • discrimination
  • inequality
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